Correcting Needless Sentence Fragments in Paragraphs

Revising Needless Sentence Fragments in Paragraphs This activity offers practice in distinguishing and rectifying unnecessary sentence pieces during the altering phase of the creative cycle. Directions The accompanying graphic passage contains three unnecessary sentence parts. To begin with, distinguish the three parts, and afterward right each oneeither by connecting it to a contiguous sentence or by transforming the piece itself into a total sentence. When youre done, contrast your adjusted sentences and those in the altered rendition of the passage beneath Anthony (unedited draft) My five-year-old child Anthony is assembled like a little wrap up toy. His dark wavy hair, shaggy eyebrows, an adorable catch nose, and rotund cheeks, which individuals cannot avoid squeezing. These make him seem as though a real existence size teddy bear. Anthony wants to wear his preferred dark calfskin coat with the picture of Mumble the penguin on the back. What's more, pants with patches on the knees because of the gaps he places in them while slithering on the floor, pushing his toy vehicles around. In fact, he is an exceptionally enthusiastic young man. In one evening, he will ride his bike, play computer games, total a 200-piece jigsaw puzzle, and, obviously, play with his toy vehicles. Truth be told, his vitality alarms me some of the time. For instance, that time on the rooftop. He shinnied up a tree and bounced onto the rooftop. Be that as it may, he wasnt vigorous (or strong) enough to move down, thus I needed to save my magnificent little wrap up toy. Here is the altered variant of Anthony, the enlightening passage that filled in as the model for the sentence-section altering exercise. Remember that there are various methods of remedying the three parts in the activity. Anthony (altered variant) My five-year-old child Anthony is constructed like a little wind-up toy. He has dark wavy hair, shaggy eyebrows, a charming catch nose, and pudgy cheeks, which individuals cannot avoid pinching. These make him seem as though a real existence size teddy bear. Anthony wants to wear his preferred dark calfskin coat with the picture of Mumble the penguin on the backâ and his preferred pants, the ones with patches on the knees. The patches spread the openings that came to fruition from creeping on the floor, pushing his toy vehicles around. Indeed, he is a vivacious young man. In one evening, he will ride his bike, play computer games, total a 200-piece jigsaw puzzle, and, obviously, play with his toy vehicles. Truth be told, his vitality alarms me sometimes. For model, I will always remember that time he shinnied up a tree and hopped onto the roof. However, he wasnt fiery (or strong) enough to move down, thus I needed to protect my great little wrap up toy.